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Hey guys, please check this out and tell me what you think of the attached song. I need suggestions on where to take this piece next.
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Just here for the pie
Reminded me of a quaint little village at first, and then the wtf part came.
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I'm looking for some constructive criticism. How should I improve the piece?
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It's like if dubstep, every love scene in media ever, and Katamari Damacy had some sort of disfigured child.
You're going big places.
You're going big places.
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Just Here For The Pie
I say keep going with the trumpet and raspberry (whatever you want to call that vocal work).
Have the trumpet go higher while the vocals get drastically ballistic then, after a bit of that, drop the trumpet and vocals and cut to something similar to the beginning. Nice and subtle. After this bridge, conclude it with the trumpet and vocals again.
Have the trumpet go higher while the vocals get drastically ballistic then, after a bit of that, drop the trumpet and vocals and cut to something similar to the beginning. Nice and subtle. After this bridge, conclude it with the trumpet and vocals again.
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Okay here's a revised version. Tell me what you think.
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You changed the entire tone of the song. It is not the same song in the least! It is a whole other song! 
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First one sounded like background porno music, and then midway a guy is just blowing into a vagina and making sounds. (99% sure I was hearing a violin in the back not a trumpet... LOL?)
Second one much nicer lmao.
Ultimately it's your vision so I don't know how to tell you to make your own song but
Sounds like it contains (excuse me if I'm completely off) a guitar, piano, noticeable bass guitar, an ambient backing (chick choir hehe), and some interesting drum thing, and that new sound not sure what to call it but its a melody in the song and keeps going except for when its replaced by the guitar, comes back in and when the instruments first start fading bit by bits
Sounds a little like it's soft, minimalistic, ambient, and easy listening. With your own interesting touch in choice of melodies and that one instrument (what is it? lol)
Hopefully you'll figure something out or move to something else.
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If you made it into an almost soft pop (which you shouldn't LOL) I could see it turning into around 1:36 to 1:55 in this song
sorry it just popped into my head haha no idea why....I also don't listen to Dido so ... lol
Post has been edited 5 time(s), last time on Apr 19 2012, 10:57 pm by EzTerix.
Second one much nicer lmao.
Ultimately it's your vision so I don't know how to tell you to make your own song but
Sounds like it contains (excuse me if I'm completely off) a guitar, piano, noticeable bass guitar, an ambient backing (chick choir hehe), and some interesting drum thing, and that new sound not sure what to call it but its a melody in the song and keeps going except for when its replaced by the guitar, comes back in and when the instruments first start fading bit by bits
Sounds a little like it's soft, minimalistic, ambient, and easy listening. With your own interesting touch in choice of melodies and that one instrument (what is it? lol)
Hopefully you'll figure something out or move to something else.
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If you made it into an almost soft pop (which you shouldn't LOL) I could see it turning into around 1:36 to 1:55 in this song
sorry it just popped into my head haha no idea why....I also don't listen to Dido so ... lol
Post has been edited 5 time(s), last time on Apr 19 2012, 10:57 pm by EzTerix.
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