[COLOR=lightyellow][SIZE=14][I]Upon death shall mind die, Upon hell shall earth sit, Into heaven our angels go, Leaving us, in the undertow. With care we shall toe that line, Over that hot bed of coals, But onto hell the sinners go, Leaving us, in the undertow. No toll on my eyes shall I pay, For in haste let us death forgo, Yet in death let us smile, For we are alive, We are all alive.[/I][/SIZE][/COLOR] [B][SIZE=6][poem I wrote --> comments much appreciated][/SIZE][/B]

Upon death shall mind die,
Upon hell shall earth sit,
Into heaven our angels go,
Leaving us, in the undertow.
With care we shall toe that line,
Over that hot bed of coals,
But onto hell the sinners go,
Leaving us, in the undertow.
No toll on my eyes shall I pay,
For in haste let us death forgo,
Yet in death let us smile,
For we are alive,
We are all alive.

[poem I wrote --> comments much appreciated]

Good, but I thought you were an atheist?

Good, but I thought you were an atheist?

[quote=lil-Inferno]Good, but I thought you were an atheist?[/quote] I am. You just don't understand the poem (it shouldn't be easy to). "Leaving us, in the undertow", just think about it.

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Good, but I thought you were an atheist?

I am. You just don't understand the poem (it shouldn't be easy to). "Leaving us, in the undertow", just think about it.

intense

intense

Meh.

Meh.

[quote=name:Greo]Meh.[/quote] Don't spam please. Try to formulate intelligent posts. People don't post things they have created to hear 'meh'. ('intense' isn't exactly a good reply either :-_-: )

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Meh.

Don't spam please. Try to formulate intelligent posts. People don't post things they have created to hear 'meh'.

('intense' isn't exactly a good reply either )

I like it. Took a second read to understand how its not religious, but it sounds good and has a pretty interesting theme. Map-worthy. THE CONFLICT THAT DROVE DEMONS AND ANGELS AWAY FROM THE MATERIAL WORLD!!!eon1E

I like it. Took a second read to understand how its not religious, but it sounds good and has a pretty interesting theme. Map-worthy. THE CONFLICT THAT DROVE DEMONS AND ANGELS AWAY FROM THE MATERIAL WORLD!!!eon1E

[quote=name:Centreri]I like it. Took a second read to understand how its not religious, but it sounds good and has a pretty interesting theme. Map-worthy. THE CONFLICT THAT DROVE DEMONS AND ANGELS AWAY FROM THE MATERIAL WORLD!!!eon1E[/quote] I'm already working on that, fool!

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I like it. Took a second read to understand how its not religious, but it sounds good and has a pretty interesting theme. Map-worthy. THE CONFLICT THAT DROVE DEMONS AND ANGELS AWAY FROM THE MATERIAL WORLD!!!eon1E

I'm already working on that, fool!