I order you to forgive yourself!
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Post feedbacks if you liked it or how I could improve it.
Funny stuff in there man, funny stuff.
I order you to forgive yourself!
Funny stuff in there man, funny stuff.
Glad you liked it.
Lotta oddly-constructed sentences that didn't flow so well... I'm not even sure I get the ending, or what happened. Breakage of the third wall seemed awkward, slightly contrived, totally unnecessary, and it broke the flow. And why digress to talk about the setting if you could've simply described it before detailing the events of the story?
None.
I order you to forgive yourself!
Lotta oddly-constructed sentences that didn't flow so well... I'm not even sure I get the ending, or what happened. Breakage of the third wall seemed awkward, slightly contrived, totally unnecessary, and it broke the flow. And why digress to talk about the setting if you could've simply described it before detailing the events of the story?
I'm pretty sure I can fix most of it, I'll try to do it before the end of the weekend.
I order you to forgive yourself!
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Wow, that makes a lot of sense. I'll change those little details right now. Seems like I'll be improving my writing skills a lot with that short story
Also, the idea I had with the ski-doo was that it would block the water that was able to go through the dam leading to the flood.
Picture of what it could look like