I got to I believe mid chapter two and ALMOST PUNCHED IN MY COMPUTER SCREEN!1!!
Oh man this is one tough RPG D:!
I saw a few minor things that can be fixed.. Like placing the start location where you center view at the beginning of the game, so you don't get that glimpse of the gateway. Also there is a grammatical error in act 1 when Marcus is talking about how he can't believe he's taking orders from demented beings such as these.. And every now and then my spell would stop working, the shrapnel. Then once the "systems restore" message appears, my shrapnel will auto fire once.
I also thought you could use the Marine's in game voice message of "When do I get out of this chicken !@$?% outfit!?".. Marcus could say that at some point maybe.. Haha =p
Overall, I think you need to do something to minimize the amount of times I have to reload my save. I died probably 15 times getting to the vitality augment, and luckily I guessed to combination on my first try! I suggest making the beginning of the game a LOT easier, until you build up a couple skills, so that you can allow the player to use spell combinations and strategies to defeat enemies, rather than just simple marine micro. Due to the extreme difficulty near the beginning, the ONLY thing you can do is micro, and it quickly becomes repetitive when you have to load your save over and over and over.. So again, make the beginning easier, and step up the difficulty later in the game, because later in the game you can allow the player to defeat enemies with a wide variety of tactics and strategies, rather than the same monotonous marine micro.. Which you can't even do against Hydralisks very well D:
Try to cut back on the amount of times people will have to reload their save, and I think you'll have a pretty fun map! Remember, the goal of the map is to be fun, not to be difficult.
Things I liked: Cooldown system, Antagonist that I can hate (computer voice), unless the computer voice turns out to be some sort of ally later on.. Hidden upgrades, etc.
I think you should also really stress the storyline heavily throughout this map, I actually want to find out what will happen next, but I'm too frustrated from DIEING to go and find out, lol
Good luck on the map, when you get out another version, or if you get out another version, I'll be sure to try it out as well.
[Edit] On more of a random note, this map really reminds me a lot of Mega Man X.. Lol
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