OK... I fixed your Cinematic.(attachment)
A few notes though.
-Dialogue... Holy shit. Fix the typos, redundancy, and the mechanics of your sentances.
"KERRIGAN
As you wish. I think I'm actually going to enjoy this which is killing you with one blow."
I think I'm going to enjoy this which is killing you with one blow.
I think I'm going to enjoy killing you with one blow.
Which one sounds better? If you said the first one, go see your 3rd grade english teacher. -Redundancy at its worst.
Sorry to sound harsh... Just makes me so mad.
But there are Many typos (Mighty, not Migthy)
Mechanics-
KERRIGAN:
I'd rather not tell but I guess this is an appropriate circumstance to tell how exactly you're dying.
I'd rather not tell... but I guess that this is an appropriate scenario to tell you exactly how you're dying.
I threw in scenario because I think it sounds cooler.
One more thing- There are multiple ways you can correct a trigger problem.
1) You can simply figure out where you screwed up.
2) You can easily create the illusion of whats happening. (For example: If you look in the sounds, I have imported the Sound for an overlord Loading in a unit. Instead of dealing with messy AI Scripts, just remove Kerrigan and play the sound, and have the overlord fly off... and no one will know!
I do it all the time.
Sounds like from the dialogue you have a pretty epic Campaign going down. Don't forget to slap it in the UMS map showcase so I can play it!
-Pyro
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