http://www.purevolume.com/piecesmended

those three songs, ones acoustic, two are electric.
for the people who don't like acoustic, eventually they'll all be electric.
these are the first demos of them.

i understand that "caught my breath" has the most vocal rough spots, keep in mind they are demos though, and will eventually get better, but i'd like you to review them for me.

thank you.

Post has been edited 1 time(s), last time on Apr 16 2009, 10:08 am by ToA.

Opinions on Song1: There was too little of an amount on variation. Since your tracks lack any percussion or additional guitars, you might want to try to add variation to your chord changes in the Future. Also, the vocals were poor and the audibility wasn't consistent throughout. I found myself actually annoyed by the material in the last minute of the song. Your song structures could be a little more inventive as well.

Opinions on Song2: The vocals are slightly improved from the first song, but I think you should considering getting some vocal effects to improve your voice since it and the guitar are the only things to focus on in the song. The guitar playing sounds a little more mature as well, but it still deeply lacks variations. And after 3:00 the vocals at that part aren't very pleasing to the ears, and the song ends pretty abruptly, which wouldn't be a problem but overall the song didn't have much emotion to it.

Opinions on Song3: First of all, it sounds like the vocals are stiff and lifeless. The lyrics sound pretty emotional, but it lacks feeling to it, this made me unable to get into the song. It was also too short of a song, but at least that kept it from becoming too repetitious.

Opinions on your music overall: Needs some editing and revision. More variation would make for a much more entertaining experience. You're voice isn't too great, but vocal effects could fix that. Also, You might want to consider getting additional tracks from perhaps a drum machine or guest guitarist because the music is fairly bland as it is. With only your voice and the guitar to focus on, it is difficult to keep interest. Try varying your chord changes, or at least varying your tempo or time signatures or volume/passion/emotion at some points. Try to really feel what you're singing about. It adds a lot to the music. Lastly, a solo or riff wouldn't kill you in a song. It could possible make them more memorable or give your audience a reason to listen again. It could earn you major points in originality too, which these songs lack.

Last of all, I don't want you to think that it's bad music, because it's not. I've definitely have heard worse, but there is a TON of room for improvement on all of these tracks. You might want to try adopting some additional influence to add variety to your mix, and of course don't forget to be more passionate and make us believe what you're singing about. You're tag says 'emo', but I don't feel any emotion from it. Also, another track such as drum machines or an additional guitarist or bassist would improve your songs a lot.

I couldn't make out your lyrics too much, so I don't have any comments for them. Sorry if my opinions seem harsh, if it makes them any less insulting, keep in mind that I mainly enjoy Metal, Jazz, and Classical Music, so I might be a little biased.

First song: Hmm, you need a better mic or you might want to practice vocals some more... The ending would have been fine if the rest of the song was fine. How to put this... It's a good idea, I do admit, however, the rest of the song does not stand up as much as the end does... So the ends looks out of place. Besides, the lack of other instruments makes things quite empty, even more when you try to kick in with those kinds of effects.

Second song: I'd have to say this is the one that stands out of the most, since I have more of a global vision, I'd picture this as a soft song in the middle of many other "heavier" songs. Though, the guitar sounds kind of... Lonely. Most probably because... There are no other instruments. Still, if you're going to do solo music (for now, at least) you must find a way to make the only instrument that is being played stand out

Third song: The guitar is well... I don't know how to describe it properly, since english isn't my native language, but honestly, I don't like how the guitar sounds... Probably because it sounds very treble-ish, since there is no bass that comes with it, but oh well. If you're going to play solo music, you need to find a way to make things not sound like this, they need to sound like they are enough to make a song for themselves.

Overall: Consistency. If it is true that variability and innovation in the notes helps to improve a song, in your case it's not that kind of consistency we speak of, but consistency voice wise. There are some parts were your voice has a higher volume (closer to the mic?) while there are other parts where the volume of the song goes down. You've yet to learn of how to make your only instrument stand out. In other words, become a better guitar player. It's the first time I've ever reviewed music, so don't blame me x.x

Should you get negative reviews, should every of us realize that we fell to the floor many times before we learned to walk.