I can tell you what I heard and saw
I can tell you how I feel
But when I try and read the line in-between
I cannot explain, and wonder if it is real.
"If a topic that clearly interest noone needs to be closed to underline the "we don't want this here" message, is up to debate."
-NudeRaider
2shortThus2ez
Gotta crawl before you walk though I guess. This was an excellent crawl.
Well the idea came to me after I read a really good line in George Orwell's 1984. This line hit me really hard, it was really tasteful.
Some context. Winston, the main character, has just gotten in contact with O'Brien, a character whom we
believe is part of a secret organization to take down Big Brother, but we don't know this for any amount of sureness. Also, telescreens are monitors that can hear and see anything you do, as well as broadcast propoganda. Up until now it was understood as a fact that they could never be disabled.
The quote
He was opposite them now. His solid form towered over the pair of them, and the expression on his face was still indecipherable. He was waiting, somewhat sternly, for Winston to speak, but about what? Even now it was quite conceivable that he was simply a busy man wondering irritably why he had been interrupted. Nobody spoke. After the stopping of the telescreen the room seemed deadly silent. The seconds marched past, enormous. With difficulty Winston continued to keep his eyes fixed on O'Brien's. Then suddenly the grim face broke down into what might have been the beginnings of a smile. With his characteristic gesture O'Brien resettled his spectacles on his nose.
The emboldened passage seemed so beautiful to me. It's what the poem is about... the feeling I got after reading it. I actually couldn't concentrate on reading after I read it, as a matter of fact...
If you notice, there is a space inbetween the first line of text and the second line of text (which is the third line) indicating the gap in understanding that the fourth line (third of text) is referring to. It's essentially me pondering the reason
why that line of text struck me so hard.
Post has been edited 1 time(s), last time on Mar 19 2012, 2:25 am by TiKels.
"If a topic that clearly interest noone needs to be closed to underline the "we don't want this here" message, is up to debate."
-NudeRaider
I thought it was about a person trying to decipher whether someone likes him in a romantic way. Nevertheless, I liked it.
Win by luck, lose by skill.
Quick and terse but so unclear,
shall context yet escape the verse?
Surely it can fit between the lines of three and four.
Post has been edited 1 time(s), last time on Mar 19 2012, 3:22 am by Sacrieur.
None.
Well the idea came to me after I read a really good line in George Orwell's 1984. This line hit me really hard, it was really tasteful.
Some context. Winston, the main character, has just gotten in contact with O'Brien, a character whom we
believe is part of a secret organization to take down Big Brother, but we don't know this for any amount of sureness. Also, telescreens are monitors that can hear and see anything you do, as well as broadcast propoganda. Up until now it was understood as a fact that they could never be disabled.
The quote
He was opposite them now. His solid form towered over the pair of them, and the expression on his face was still indecipherable. He was waiting, somewhat sternly, for Winston to speak, but about what? Even now it was quite conceivable that he was simply a busy man wondering irritably why he had been interrupted. Nobody spoke. After the stopping of the telescreen the room seemed deadly silent. The seconds marched past, enormous. With difficulty Winston continued to keep his eyes fixed on O'Brien's. Then suddenly the grim face broke down into what might have been the beginnings of a smile. With his characteristic gesture O'Brien resettled his spectacles on his nose.
The emboldened passage seemed so beautiful to me. It's what the poem is about... the feeling I got after reading it. I actually couldn't concentrate on reading after I read it, as a matter of fact...
If you notice, there is a space inbetween the first line of text and the second line of text (which is the third line) indicating the gap in understanding that the fourth line (third of text) is referring to. It's essentially me pondering the reason
why that line of text struck me so hard.
Where is all this in the poem? Let your reader into the room.
This explanation and the poem shouldn't be separated. The poem shouldn't be some strange code for an occurence. They should be joined together.
None.
It was a moment of sudden inspiration, not something I thought out. I read the line and the phrases came into my head. Adding anything feels wrong.
"If a topic that clearly interest noone needs to be closed to underline the "we don't want this here" message, is up to debate."
-NudeRaider
