I actually just saw that movie today and figured that that might have been where this was coming from when I read it.
Notes (in no particular order):
1. Not sure why you center your poem. It's weird. I'd rather see it with normal line delineation.
2. Strange Phrasing:
Look at their faces
They do not appear to be.
What does this even mean?
3. You have a pretty good use of rhythm throughout the poem.
4. Overall the poem is pretty simple - nothing too special. A few good ideas, though. In any case, I would suggest you keep writing - not every poem has to be profound or some sort of masterpiece. Writing poetry can be a great outlet for anyone that's drawn to doing it.
5. "Inhumanity;" - not sure if you knew this when you did it, but a colon would be far more appropriate than a semi-colon here. Think of a semi-colon as a soft period - both clauses conjoined by the semi-colon need to have a subject and a predicate (if you are attempting to use proper english).
6. Favorite part:
It amazes me how
You have yet to die.
I do not have proof
Outside of my mind,
But cut me open
And that's what you'll find.
Especially the cut me open part.
7. Meaningless phrases? For example, these two lines:
Testaments ruined.
Glories sacrificed.
What do these 2 lines have to do with the rest of the poem? Do they do anything other than sound nice? (of course i may just be missing something)
8. Pronoun usage? The 'you' in the poem is pretty vague. I think it may be changing throughout the poem, too. I'm not sure. I'm not sure it's a good thing. The poem might be better if you clearly establish who the speaker is, and who the speaker is talking to. It may make perfect sense in your head, but if you want to most effectively translate your meaning to the reader, you'll probably want/need to be more specific.
9. On that note, maybe use more specific details. Rather than saying things like 'what you do' specify something the subject has done, a particular instance, and try to draw from it in order to create an image. It will attract your reader more and create a greater understanding of the poem. For instance, the 'what you do' in the poem could be put in a number of different ways with the use of specific language. You could say something like... it's the
killing that makes you see inhumanity. or it could be their
callousness or their
dishonesty or their
lack of regret or any number of things. And thus, what you specify as the trait that creates inhumanity, specifically, will create a stronger piece, which has a clearer meaning and stance.
Hope I could help out a little.
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